onemotion.co.uk

[Lt Major Burns]

1)

the inital look of the site is very nice, the design contemporary. however, it seems like a very long page. it was only after looking at it in more detail the second time that i found out that it wasn't really that long....

i would have everything visible on one , say, 800x600 screen, with the menu for the deeper stuff. the front page should make an impact, with a brief amount of information, but with the impression that all the information is in the site somewhere. never hide information in large paragraphs.

although it's just about the biggest cliche, apple are very good here. their front page is concise, and all of it is visible from a small screen. the menu is very clear, too. in the deeper pages, no paragraphs are that big, and it is, overall, friendly. it follows a system.

2)

the spelling/grammar/general english use. you should exude confidence, but not arrogance.

Media: Some members of our team have the skill of Music editing on Garageband by Apple and Soundtrack Pro and some have the skill of Video editing on Final Cut Studio and iMovie by Apple.

Media: Got various media files you want to put in your site? We can do all of this for you with skilled imaging, video and sound editors that can make all your current media spring to life on the web, or even create original, exciting media, just for you!

or something.

[lbj]

Originally Posted by Lt Major Burns

the spelling/grammar/general english use. you should exude confidence, but not arrogance.

Seriously, skip the confidence for now. Concentrate on plain competence.

Nothing makes me run from a professional web site faster than misspelled words, horrible syntax, and just plain bad grammar.

The overall "look" is good. Now make reading it a similar pleasure.