hows this look so far?

Not too good at this stage. There seems to be either missing or incorrect formatting of the text; missing bullet points, missing full stops, new sentence begins without capital, and line breaks in odd places.
See the attached screenshot from Safari browser. Check your code and make sure you are marking your paragraphs correctly, and not putting in any line break tags.

I'd suggest breaking it up into a few sections, such as your recycling program, technical support, products and services. Bunch things together so people can see at a glance what you offer, and read into that if they're interested.

The site navigation menu should say "New Computers" rather than "newcomputers"; and so on. I suspect you're doing this for effect, but it only conveys the effect of someone using bad grammar.

Finally, consider what you have to offer that goes above and beyond what's on offer from all the other computer dealers out there. At the bottom of your page, I noticed you've mentioned your "UNEEC Cases" (whatever they are). If they're an interesting product, then show people. Your site's main page should show off one of your better products in as attractive a way as possible (without lying, of course). Below that, you'd have a few "interesting" links to products and services you're offering ... "Recyle your old PC, save the Earth, and get CASH!*" or some other neatly presented bait to hook a customer's interest.

One thing you have managed to get pretty much spot-on is the most important rule: make it friendly. :) Play on that a bit.
 

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Just a thought, but it's not exactly obvious that the navigation bar actually is a navigation bar. Many less experienced browsers will simply read it as a list of services offered, and won't think to click on it. Maybe you should think about making this look more like buttons, or something that invites the user to interact with it.

If you're intended market is local to the Dover area, then you could use a photograph of your town (one that you have taken yourself, or you'll be in breach of copyright law) as a sort of theme or backdrop along the menu part. It might look very nice with a local skyline or cityscape toward the wider right end of the menu, graduated to a flat colour at the left where the navigation options are, on the narrower end.
Play around with some images and colour, and have some fun with it.
 
Might want to try putting the contact information at the bottom of the page and maybe look into getting a different email address. @yahoo.com doesn't always look the greatest for business.

-Juxel
 
About font: In my browser (OS 9 IE 5.1) the text renders as Geneva 13, which (maybe it's just me) is rather unattractive on-screen. Try listing Arial as your primary font.

-- browncat
 
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